Band 6.0 model answer
174 wordsThe table shows the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010, and the two pie charts show the percentage of local and international students, divided by gender.
In 2001 there were 33,657 local students and 5,192 international students, so the total was 38,849. In 2010 the number of local students increased to 39,488, and the number of international students increased to 14,593. The total became 54,081.
The pie charts show that in 2001 local students were 87 per cent of all students. Local males were 44 per cent and local females 43 per cent. International students were only 13 per cent, with 9 per cent males and 4 per cent females.
In 2010 the percentage of local students decreased to 73 per cent, with 38 per cent males and 35 per cent females. International students increased to 27 per cent, with 15 per cent males and 12 per cent females.
In conclusion, the number of research students increased in this period, and the percentage of international students became much bigger.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both the table and the charts are covered with accurate figures, which secures Task Achievement at this level.
- The two sources are described one after the other and the relationship between rising numbers and falling share is not explained.
- Vocabulary is adequate but repetitive, with students, increased and per cent recurring.
- Sentences are mainly simple and compound, with figures presented one per clause.