Band 6.0 model answer
244 wordsToday many people wear a smart watch or use an application which counts their steps, their sleep and their heart rate every day. In my opinion, this is mostly a positive development, although it also has some risks.
Firstly, these devices motivate people to move more. When a person sees that he walked only two thousand steps today, he feels that he must go outside, and a small goal like ten thousand steps is easy to understand. Many people who never did sport before started walking or running because of this.
Secondly, these devices can find health problems early. A watch can notice that the heart rhythm is not normal, and the person goes to the doctor before something serious happens. There are many stories about people whose life was saved in this way.
On the other hand, some people become too worried about the numbers. If they sleep badly for one night, they think they are ill, and this stress is worse for their health than the bad sleep. In addition, all this information about our body is collected by big companies. We do not know exactly who reads this data, and maybe in the future an insurance company will use it to increase the price for people who do not exercise.
In conclusion, I believe that health tracking is useful because it encourages exercise and can detect illness early, but governments should make strict rules about who can use this personal information.
Why this is Band 6.0
- A verdict is given and both sides are covered, but the ideas are general and the privacy issue is only touched on.
- Cohesion is clear and mechanical.
- Vocabulary is adequate with repetition of health, people and watch.
- Sentences are largely simple and compound with limited variety.