Band 6.0 model answer
255 wordsIn many towns the small family shops have closed and big supermarkets have taken their place. This change brings advantages for customers, but it also creates problems for the community.
The main advantage is price and choice. A supermarket buys enormous quantities directly from producers, so it can sell much cheaper than a small shop. For a family with a low salary, this difference is very important. The customer can also find everything in one building: bread, meat, vegetables, medicine and clothes, so he saves a lot of time.
Another advantage is quality control and working hours. Big shops have refrigerators, they check the products, and many of them are open until late in the evening or twenty-four hours, which is very useful for people who finish work at nine o'clock.
On the other hand, small shops give work to local families, and the money stays in the town. When a supermarket opens, the profit goes to the head office in the capital or even to another country, and the town becomes poorer.
In addition, supermarkets are usually built outside the town, so a person needs a car. Old people who cannot drive lose their nearest shop and depend on their children. The small shop was also a place where neighbours met and talked, and for a person living alone this was sometimes the only conversation of the day.
In conclusion, supermarkets give cheaper products and save time, but they take money out of the local economy and create difficulties for people without a car.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both sides are covered with relevant points, but they are stated rather than developed.
- Cohesion is clear and mechanical.
- Vocabulary is adequate with repetition of shops, people and prices.
- Sentences are largely simple and compound with limited variety.