Band 6.0 model answer
232 wordsIn many countries the government has increased the age when people can receive a pension. This decision has some advantages, but also several disadvantages.
The first advantage is economic. People today live much longer than fifty years ago, so if everybody retires at sixty, the state must pay a pension for twenty-five or thirty years. When people work five years more, the government collects more taxes and pays fewer years of pension, so the system does not collapse.
Another advantage is for the person. Some people feel useless and become depressed when they suddenly stop working, and they lose contact with their colleagues. If they continue working, they keep their routine, they stay active and they also earn more money for their old age.
However, there are serious disadvantages. Not all jobs are the same. An office worker can easily work until sixty-seven, but a builder or a miner has back problems and cannot do heavy physical work at this age. For these people, a later retirement means several years of pain or of unemployment.
In addition, older workers occupy positions that young people need. If a company does not have free places, young graduates cannot start their career, and youth unemployment increases.
In conclusion, working longer helps the state budget and keeps people active, but it is unfair for people with physically difficult jobs and may create problems for young workers.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both sides are covered with relevant points, but they are stated rather than developed.
- Cohesion is clear and mechanical.
- Vocabulary is adequate with repetition of old people, work and pension.
- Sentences are largely simple and compound with limited variety.