Band 6.0 model answer
220 wordsToday many people read the news on the internet, and sometimes this information is not true. Some people think that news companies should be punished by law if they publish something wrong. I agree with this idea in general, but I think it must have some limits.
On the one hand, false news can be very dangerous. During the pandemic, for example, wrong information about medicine made some people refuse treatment. Also, false stories about politicians can change the result of an election. On the internet a story travels to millions of people in a few hours, and even if the newspaper says sorry the next day, most readers never see the correction.
Furthermore, if there is no punishment, some websites publish shocking stories only to get more clicks and more advertising money. A law would force them to check the facts before publishing.
On the other hand, a very strict law can be dangerous too. Journalists sometimes write about corruption, and they cannot always prove everything immediately. If they are afraid of going to court, they will not write these important stories, and the government or rich businessmen can hide their crimes.
In conclusion, I believe news organisations should be responsible for what they publish, but the law should punish only serious and intentional lies, not every small mistake.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both sides are covered and the position is clear, but the reasoning is general — the essay asserts that fake news is dangerous without tracing a consequence.
- Cohesion relies on visible connectors at the start of each paragraph.
- Vocabulary is adequate with repetition of news, people and information.
- Grammar is accurate but the sentence patterns repeat.