Band 6.0 model answer
227 wordsMuseums and historical places keep the history and culture of a country. Some people think that everybody should enter them without paying. In my opinion, this is a good idea, but the government must think about the money.
Firstly, museums are educational places. Children learn about their history and about art, and this is much better than reading only from books. If a family has three or four children, the tickets become expensive and the parents cannot take them. So a free entrance helps poor families to give a good education to their children.
Secondly, these places belong to all the nation, not to one company. The objects inside them were made by our ancestors, so it is strange to pay money to see our own history. Free entrance also brings more tourists to the city, and tourists spend money in hotels, restaurants and shops.
On the other hand, museums need a lot of money. They must pay salaries, repair old buildings and protect the objects from damage. If there is no ticket money, the government must pay everything, and maybe it will reduce the budget for hospitals or schools.
In conclusion, I agree that museums and historical sites should be free for visitors, because they are educational and they belong to everyone. However, the government should give them enough money so that they can work properly.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both sides are covered and the position is clear, but development is thin — the essay states that museums are educational without showing what changes when entry is free.
- Cohesion is correct and visible; every paragraph begins with a connector.
- Vocabulary is adequate with useful topic items (culture, heritage, entrance fee) but repeated.
- Sentences are largely simple and compound; complex forms appear but with limited variety.