Band 6.0 model answer
224 wordsIn many companies, young employees receive more chances to learn new skills than older ones. Some people think the law should make employers give the same training to all workers. I agree with this opinion.
Firstly, it is not fair to give fewer opportunities to a person because of their age. Older workers do the same job and have the same responsibilities, so they should have the same rights. If a company teaches a new computer system only to young staff, older employees cannot do their work well, and then the company says they are not good workers. This is a problem that the company created itself.
Secondly, older workers have a lot of experience. They know the customers, they know the problems of the company, and they can teach younger colleagues. If they also receive modern training, they become very useful employees. So training them is not a waste of money for the company.
However, some employers say that older workers will retire soon, so the training money is lost. I understand this idea, but many people now work until they are sixty-five or older, so the company still has many years to get the benefit.
In conclusion, I agree that employers should be required to train older workers equally, because it is fair and because these workers are valuable for the company.
Why this is Band 6.0
- A clear position with two relevant reasons, but the support stays at the level of assertion — the essay says older workers are experienced without showing why that changes an employer's decision.
- Cohesion is correct but mechanical; every paragraph opens with a connector.
- Vocabulary is adequate and topic-appropriate, with repetition of training and older workers throughout.
- Mostly simple and compound sentences; complex forms appear but follow a single pattern.