Band 6.0 model answer
289 wordsSome people believe that university students must study other subjects which are not connected to their main subject, for example history or philosophy. I agree with this opinion because it is useful for students, but I think it should not be for every student.
Firstly, studying different subjects helps students to think better. If a student only studies engineering, he knows a lot about engineering but he does not know about society or history. When he works in a company later, he must talk with many different people and understand their problems. Subjects like philosophy teach students how to argue and how to look at a problem from another side. These skills are useful in every job.
Secondly, many people change their career after university. A student who studies chemistry may work in business or in media after some years. If he studied only chemistry, this change is more difficult for him. So extra subjects give students more choice in the future and they are not limited to one area.
However, I do not think that all students should do this. Some courses, such as medicine, are already very long and difficult. Medical students study for six years and they have very little free time. If we add more subjects for them, they will be very tired and their main study will suffer. Also, if students are forced to take a subject, sometimes they do not study it seriously and they only want to pass the exam.
In conclusion, I agree that studying subjects outside the main field is good for students because it develops their thinking and helps their career. But universities should decide it for each course, and it should not be a rule for all students.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Task Response is adequate: the position is clear from the first paragraph and both reasons are relevant, but the ideas stay general and the examples are not developed.
- Cohesion relies on the visible connectors — Firstly, Secondly, In conclusion. They are used correctly, which is enough for Band 6, but the paragraphs are not linked to each other by meaning.
- Lexical resource is adequate for the topic, with some repetition of subjects and students where a Band 7 answer would substitute disciplines or undergraduates.
- Sentence forms are mostly simple and compound; the few complex sentences are correct but follow the same pattern.