Band 6.0 model answer
214 wordsNowadays machines do many tasks that people did before, for example in factories, banks and shops. Some people believe that because of this, human skills are not valuable anymore. I partly agree with this opinion.
On the one hand, it is true that some skills are less useful now. In the past, a person who could calculate quickly or write neatly could find a good job easily. Today computers do these things faster and without mistakes, so these abilities are not special anymore. Many workers in factories also lost their jobs because robots can do the same work all day without rest. For these people, their skills really became less valuable.
On the other hand, machines cannot do everything. They cannot understand emotions, they cannot make difficult decisions when the situation is new, and they cannot create original ideas. Doctors, teachers and managers still need these human abilities every day. In fact, because machines do the simple work, people have more time for the difficult work, and these skills become more important than before.
In conclusion, I agree that some simple and repeated skills lost their value because of machines. However, I do not agree that human skills in general are less valuable, because the skills that machines cannot copy are now more necessary.
Why this is Band 6.0
- The position is stated and both sides are covered, but the examples stay general — 'many jobs' and 'some people' are asserted rather than explained.
- Paragraphs are organised and the connectors are used correctly, which is enough for Band 6, but ideas are linked only at the start of sentences.
- Lexical range is adequate for the topic with noticeable repetition of machines and skills.
- Grammar is generally accurate but the structures repeat; there is little variation in sentence opening.