Band 6.0 model answer
254 wordsEvery day companies collect enormous amounts of information about us: which websites we visit, where we go with our telephone, what we buy and even how long we look at a photograph. Most people do not understand how much information is collected, and this creates several problems.
The first problem is that people cannot give real permission. Before using an application, we must accept a document of fifty pages written in difficult legal language. Nobody reads it, everybody clicks 'accept', so this permission does not mean anything. In reality the user does not know what he agreed to.
The second problem is security. When one company keeps the personal information of millions of people in one place, this becomes a target for criminals. If there is an attack, our passwords, addresses and bank details appear on the internet, and criminals use them to steal money or to open accounts in our name.
One solution is stronger laws. Governments should say clearly which information a company can collect and forbid the collection of everything else. The fine must be very big, because if the fine is small, a big company simply pays it and continues.
Another solution is education. Schools should teach young people how to check the settings of their telephone, how to refuse cookies and why they should not share personal details with unknown websites.
In conclusion, mass collection of data destroys real consent and creates a danger of theft, but strict laws with serious fines and better education can protect ordinary users.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both parts are answered and the solutions relate to the problems.
- Ideas are general — 'companies should protect data better' is not developed.
- Cohesion is clear and mechanical.
- Vocabulary is adequate with repetition of data, companies and people.