Band 6.0 model answer
245 wordsIn many countries the number of children with excess weight has increased very quickly in the last twenty years. This creates serious problems, but governments, schools and families can take action.
The first problem is health. Children who are very overweight can develop diabetes, high blood pressure and problems with their joints, and doctors now see these illnesses in teenagers, although before they appeared only in older people. These children will need medical treatment for many years, and this is very expensive for the health system.
The second problem is psychological. Overweight children are often laughed at by other children at school. They lose their confidence, they do not want to do sport, and some of them become depressed or stop going to school. This can affect their whole life.
One solution is to change the food in schools. If schools sell only healthy meals and remove machines with sweets and sugary drinks, children will eat better for five days every week. Schools can also teach children how to cook simple healthy dishes.
Another solution is more physical activity. Many children spend all their free time with a telephone or a computer, so schools should give more sport lessons, and cities should build safe playgrounds and cycle paths so that children can play outside without danger from cars.
In conclusion, childhood obesity damages both the health and the confidence of children, but healthier school food and more opportunities for exercise can reduce this problem significantly.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both parts are answered with relevant content, and solutions broadly correspond to the problems.
- Ideas are general — 'parents should cook healthy food' is not developed into how that becomes possible.
- Cohesion is clear and mechanical.
- Vocabulary is adequate with repetition of children, food and healthy.