Band 6.0 model answer
273 wordsIn many countries students must borrow a large sum of money to pay for their university education, and after graduation they need many years to return it. This situation creates several problems, but there are also possible solutions.
The first problem is financial pressure on young people. A graduate starts his working life already owing thousands of dollars, so a big part of his salary goes to the bank every month. Because of this, he cannot save money for a flat, and many young people live with their parents until thirty years old or delay having children.
The second problem is that students choose their subject for the wrong reason. A student who loves history or art may study business or computer science instead, because he is afraid that he will not be able to pay his debt with a small salary. So society loses good teachers, artists and historians.
One solution is that the government should pay for part of the education, especially for subjects which the country needs, such as medicine or teaching. If a student agrees to work in a village school for five years, the government can cancel his debt.
Another solution is to develop other kinds of education. Not every job needs a four-year university degree, and short professional courses are much cheaper. If young people know that they can become a good electrician or programmer in one year, fewer of them will take a big loan.
In conclusion, student debt delays the normal life of young people and pushes them to choose subjects only for money, but government support and cheaper professional courses can reduce this problem.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both parts are answered and the solutions correspond loosely to the problems.
- Ideas are relevant but general — 'the government should reduce fees' is not developed.
- Cohesion is clear and mechanical.
- Vocabulary is adequate with repetition of students, money and university.