Band 6.0 model answer
239 wordsIn many big cities today, the price of houses and flats is so high that ordinary workers cannot afford to live there. This situation creates serious problems, but there are also some possible solutions.
The first problem is that important workers leave the city. Nurses, teachers, bus drivers and police officers do not earn a high salary, so they cannot pay the rent in the centre. When they move to another city, hospitals and schools do not have enough staff, and the quality of these services becomes worse for everybody.
Another problem is long travelling. Workers who stay must live far from the city and travel two or three hours every day. They are tired, they spend a lot of money on transport, and they have less time for their family. This also creates more traffic and more pollution in the city.
To solve these problems, the government should build more affordable housing. If there are more flats, the prices will go down. The government can also give financial help to workers such as nurses and teachers, so they can pay the rent.
In addition, companies can allow their staff to work from home for some days. Then workers do not need to live near the office and they can choose a cheaper city.
In conclusion, unaffordable housing makes cities lose their workers and forces long journeys, but building more homes and helping key workers can improve the situation.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both parts of the task are answered and the solutions relate loosely to the problems, but the connection is not made explicit.
- Ideas are relevant but general — the essay says the government should build houses without saying where or how.
- Cohesion is clear and mechanical, with connectors opening each paragraph.
- Vocabulary is adequate; expensive, houses and people repeat throughout.