Band 6.0 model answer
255 wordsEvery year millions of tonnes of plastic go into the seas and oceans. This creates very serious problems, but there are some ways to reduce this situation.
The first problem is the death of sea animals. Turtles think that plastic bags are jellyfish and eat them, and then they cannot digest food and they die. Birds and fish also eat small pieces of plastic, and some animals get caught in old fishing nets and cannot swim.
The second problem is for human health. Plastic in the water breaks into very small pieces called microplastics. Small fish eat these pieces, bigger fish eat the small fish, and finally people eat this fish. Scientists have already found microplastics in drinking water and even in human blood, and we do not know exactly what damage this will cause.
To solve these problems, governments should ban single-use plastic like bags, straws and bottles, or put a tax on them so that people use bags many times. Many countries already did this and the number of plastic bags decreased very quickly.
In addition, countries should build better systems for collecting rubbish. In many poor countries there are no rubbish trucks in small towns, so people throw everything into the river and the river carries it to the sea. If rich countries help to build these systems, the amount of plastic in the ocean will decrease.
In conclusion, plastic waste kills sea animals and enters our food, but bans on single-use plastic and better waste collection can significantly reduce the problem.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both parts of the task are answered and the solutions relate to the problems, though the link is not made explicit.
- Ideas are relevant but general — 'people should use less plastic' is not developed into how.
- Cohesion is clear and mechanical, with connectors opening each paragraph.
- Vocabulary is adequate with repetition of plastic, ocean and animals.