Band 6.0 model answer
212 wordsChildren see a large number of advertisements every day on television and on the internet. Some people think this should be forbidden by law, while others say advertising is a normal part of business. In my opinion, advertising to small children should be strictly limited.
On the one hand, children cannot understand the purpose of advertising. A small child believes what he sees, and he does not know that the company wants to take money from his parents. Because of this, children ask for expensive toys and unhealthy food, and this creates arguments in the family. Advertising also teaches children that happiness comes from buying things, which is a bad lesson for the future.
On the other hand, advertising pays for many things that children enjoy. Cartoons, free games and many websites exist because companies pay for advertisements. If we ban all advertising, these programmes will disappear or parents will have to pay for them. Some people also say that it is the responsibility of the parents to explain to their children what advertising is.
In conclusion, although advertising brings money for children's programmes, I believe that advertising to young children should be banned, because they are too young to protect themselves. Parents cannot control everything their children watch on the internet.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both views are covered with relevant points and an opinion is given, but the reasoning stays general.
- Cohesion is clear and mechanical, with the opinion appearing at the end.
- Vocabulary is adequate with repetition of children, advertising and parents.
- Sentence forms are mainly simple and compound with some accurate complex clauses.