Band 6.0 model answer
221 wordsMany big cities today have serious traffic problems, and some governments want to reduce the number of cars in the centre. Other people think this rule creates difficulties for citizens. In my opinion, limiting cars is necessary if there is good public transport.
On the one hand, there are clear benefits. Fewer cars means less pollution, and the air in the centre becomes healthier for everybody, especially for children and old people. The streets are also safer and quieter, so people can walk and use bicycles without danger. In addition, when there is less traffic, buses move faster and everybody arrives on time.
On the other hand, this rule can create problems. Some people work far from the centre and start their job at five o'clock in the morning, when there are no buses. Other people carry heavy equipment, for example electricians or plumbers, and they cannot take these tools in the metro. For these workers, a restriction means they lose money or even lose their job.
Moreover, shops in the centre may lose customers if people cannot come by car, and some small businesses may close.
In conclusion, I support limiting cars in city centres because of the health benefits, but the government must first build good public transport and give special permission to workers who really need a vehicle.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both views are covered and an opinion is stated, but the objections are general — the essay says some people need cars without saying who.
- Cohesion is correct and mechanical, with connectors opening each paragraph.
- Vocabulary is adequate with repetition of cars, city centre and people.
- Sentences are mainly simple and compound with some correct complex clauses.