Band 6.0 model answer
252 wordsIn many countries today, not many young people want to become plumbers, electricians or carpenters. There are several reasons for this situation, and governments and schools can take some steps to change it.
The main reason is that these jobs do not have a good image. Parents and teachers usually tell children that they must go to university, because they think office work is more respectable than working with your hands. Young people hear this message from childhood, so they believe that a manual job means they failed at school.
Another reason is that students do not know much about these professions. At school they learn mathematics, history and languages, but nobody explains how to become an electrician or how much an electrician earns. Many young people would be surprised to know that a good plumber can earn more than an office worker.
To solve this problem, schools should invite people from these professions to talk with students and show them the real work. If a student can visit a workshop and try the job for one day, his opinion may change completely.
In addition, the government should create more apprenticeship programmes where young people can earn money while they are learning. Many families cannot pay for long studies, so a paid programme is very attractive for them.
In conclusion, young people avoid manual trades because of social opinion and because of a lack of information, but school programmes and paid apprenticeships could encourage more of them to choose these useful careers.
Why this is Band 6.0
- Both questions are answered, which is the essential requirement, and the suggestions relate to the causes given.
- Ideas are relevant but general: the essay says parents want university without explaining how that reaches the student's decision.
- Cohesion is clear and mechanical, with a connector at the start of each paragraph.
- Vocabulary is adequate, with job, work and young people repeated throughout.